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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 22:31, 29 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 22:31, 29 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

  • Clarify that the 1st Cav Div is in Army Group reserve
    • done.
  • Of two regiments of the 42nd either "in two" or "Of the two"
    • done.
  • Similarly, the 108th Infantry Regiment of the 40th Infantry Division Slavonska, which had mobilised in Bjelovar, was marching towards Virovitica to take up positions. On the night of 7/8 April, the Croats of the 108th Regiment revolted, arrested their Serb officers, non-commissioned officers and soldiers. The regiment then marched back to Bjelovar, where it joined up with other rebellious units about noon on 8 April This whole bit is kind of awkward. I'd suggest moving the second sentence first and then combining the first and third sentences as, otherwise, the regiment's activities immediately before the rebellion break the flow of the narrative. Not sure I'm really conveying what I mean, but see if I'm making any sense.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 13:04, 6 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Comments. As always, feel free to revert my copyediting. - Dank (push to talk)

No, it all looks ok to me, Dan. thanks! Peacemaker67 (send... over) 09:21, 10 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Sure thing. - Dank (push to talk) 10:53, 10 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]