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Requested move 24 February 2020

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The following discussion is an archived discussion of a requested move. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made in a new section on the talk page. No further edits should be made to this section.

Moved as proposed. Appropriate splitting can now be done boldly by discussion participants. BD2412 T 23:22, 7 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Heat-not-burn productHeated tobacco product – "Heated tobacco product" is the name used by the US CDC (e.g., https://www.cdc.gov/tobacco/basic_information/heated-tobacco-products/index.html), US FDA, and WHO (e.g. https://www.who.int/tobacco/publications/prod_regulation/heated-tobacco-products/en/). "Heat not burn" is a potentially misleading marketing phrase because some of the products do burn some of the constituents. DrNicotiana (talk) 19:56, 24 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]

The above discussion is preserved as an archive of a requested move. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made in a new section on this talk page. No further edits should be made to this section.

Copyeditor passing by

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Hi. You probably got here from one of the many tags I added to the article. There are some things to unpack here.

  • Jargon. This article feels like it was written by someone who is in science, possibly medicine. Some of the information taken from research papers should be wikilinked or defined in-text, as unfamiliar readers are left to figure out what they mean. On the flip side, more specialised terms about smoking should also be defined, such as "throat hit".
  • Tone. Parts of the article are reaching for conclusions and use normative statements, such as Marketing slogans like "heat-not-burn" cannot be a substitute for science and This advertisement claim is not a replacement for science, and hard opinions like Philip Morris International intends to convert its customers in Japan to using heated tobacco products, which all skew the article's neutrality. It is not Wikipedia's job to tell readers how they should feel; readers should be able to do that themselves with the information given. These sentences should either be removed, or if pertinent enough, have the people who espouse these opinions attributed in-text.
  • Article structure. When I was first alerted to this article it was because of {{repetition}}. After doing my first pass, I removed so many extraneous citations as virtually every sentence was cited, many of which to only one source for a paragraph. The article reads like a lightly-structured stream-of-consciousness piece, which goes far beyond copy editing: while information like the science and products are grouped together, there is no internal cohesion within them, leading to out-of-place sentences like Outside of an IQOS retail shop in Canada, marketing included a display sign with the message, "Building a Smoke-Free Future" peppered in the article. Interested editors should use this talk page to plan an outline to determine what each individual paragraph should focus on. —Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 18:21, 5 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Yes. What is this article even about? Is it about devices that heat tobacco (products)? Or rather about tobacco products that are heated? The first sentences alternate between those two: A heated tobacco product (HTP) is a tobacco product that heats the tobacco [...]. These products contain nicotine [...]. The heat generates an aerosol or smoke to be inhaled from the tobacco [...]. HTPs may also contain additives not found in tobacco [...].[32] HTPs generally heat tobacco [...].2A02:908:5A4:B000:81ED:F0AE:5001:E87 (talk) 16:53, 25 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Ploom

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Is this the type product in the article?— Vchimpanzee • talk • contributions • 20:29, 28 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]