Talk:Ludwell–Paradise House
Ludwell–Paradise House is currently an Art and architecture good article nominee. Nominated by Pbritti (talk) at 22:23, 26 April 2024 (UTC) An editor has reviewed the article, and left comments on the review page. However, this editor has requested a second opinion either from a more experienced reviewer, or someone with more expertise on this subject, to gain further consensus that this article meets the good article criteria. In the meantime, editors are encouraged to revise the article based on the first reviewer's comments. Short description: 18th-century home in Williamsburg, Virginia |
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[edit]- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Launchballer talk 19:10, 19 May 2024 (UTC)
- ... that John D. Rockefeller Jr., under the name "David's Father", secretly authorized the purchase of an $8,000 "antique" (pictured)?
- Source: Kopper, Philip (1986). Colonial Williamsburg. New York City: Harry N. Abrams, Inc., Colonial Williamsburg Foundation.
- Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/German atrocities committed against Soviet prisoners of war
Number of QPQs required: 1. Nominator has 48 past nominations.
Post-promotion hook changes will be logged on the talk page; consider watching the nomination until the hook appears on the Main Page.Pbritti (talk) 21:48, 26 April 2024 (UTC).
- AGF on offline book source. Article expansion is sufficient and recent, QPQ done. No copyvio is detected, Earwig flags a bibliography item and a direct quote only. Hook is good. To DYKA you go. Juxlos (talk) 17:04, 27 April 2024 (UTC)
- @Pbritti and Juxlos: Hook needs an end-of-sentence citation.--Launchballer 10:36, 18 May 2024 (UTC)
- @Launchballer: Done. ~ Pbritti (talk) 14:42, 18 May 2024 (UTC)
- There should also be a citation for the sentence with "$8,000" in it.--Launchballer 14:45, 18 May 2024 (UTC)
- @Launchballer: Done. ~ Pbritti (talk) 17:30, 18 May 2024 (UTC)
- My concern has been resolved.--Launchballer 22:17, 18 May 2024 (UTC)
- @Launchballer: Done. ~ Pbritti (talk) 17:30, 18 May 2024 (UTC)
- There should also be a citation for the sentence with "$8,000" in it.--Launchballer 14:45, 18 May 2024 (UTC)
- @Launchballer: Done. ~ Pbritti (talk) 14:42, 18 May 2024 (UTC)
- @Pbritti and Juxlos: Hook needs an end-of-sentence citation.--Launchballer 10:36, 18 May 2024 (UTC)
GA Review
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Nominator: Pbritti (talk · contribs) 22:23, 26 April 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Rollinginhisgrave (talk · contribs) 10:04, 30 July 2024 (UTC)
I'll review this. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 10:04, 30 July 2024 (UTC)
General comments
[edit]I'm really excited to review this, thankyou for the opportunity.
I usually do a ce as I go through articles to avoid listing typos etcetera, but I made more changes than usual, I hope you can have a look over them and see if they're alright with you. I've left the review there for now, I'll continue once you have a chance to address the concerns. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 11:23, 30 July 2024 (UTC)
- Your changes are noted; there are (maybe) two I might like see reverted, but that's something I'll sit on for a bit! Thanks for jumping right in! ~ Pbritti (talk) 20:43, 30 July 2024 (UTC)
- Very happy with your reverts/clarifications, thanks for sparing some time even though you're busy. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 03:59, 31 July 2024 (UTC)
Continued review and replied to comments. If I don't reply to a comment it just means I agree with you. I had a more major concern at the end concerning WP:GACR #3, I hope you can address it. Again, take your time, there's no rush, tell me if you disagree and we can discuss. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 16:17, 2 August 2024 (UTC)
Prose and content
[edit]"brickwork indicates the entire building was completed simultaneously"
: Is this in the body?- Yep! Final sentence of the first paragraph of the Design section. ~ Pbritti (talk) 02:02, 16 August 2024 (UTC)
"Though their legal claim to the house was unfounded"
more exposition is needed"and Lee"
irrelevant- There's contention that Lee was actually the legal owner of the home when it was seized, so the mention of both Paradise and Lee here reflects this nebulous legal status. ~ Pbritti (talk) 02:03, 16 August 2024 (UTC)
"One of Philip Barziza's sons, the Confederate officer and Texas politician Decimus et Ultimus Barziza, would be born there"
weird tense, reword to past for consistency"Decimus (nicknamed "Dessie")"
why is "Dessie" not mentioned in the topic article?- That article is less complete. I'm using sources that could be used to supplement that article. Might get around to improving it someday. ~ Pbritti (talk) 01:58, 31 July 2024 (UTC)
"plan to restore Williamsburg to its 18th-century appearance"
was his plan really to restore Williamsburg to its 18th-century appearance? If that's true that's crazy"glazed headers"
What are headers?- Defined in the body. ~ Pbritti (talk) 01:58, 31 July 2024 (UTC)
- This doesn't matter, as 1) most people only read the lead, and 2) summary style says the lead should be the most readable part of the article. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 16:17, 2 August 2024 (UTC)
"and fronted to Duke of Gloucester Street"
Does it still not?"Because the eastern lot did escheat to the city like the other two..."
the other two? Also: gloss on escheat. This sentence is quite confusing."Some later thinking–including by Colonial Williamsburg restoration architects Perry, Shaw and Hepburn–"
->"later restoration architects"
. A lot of e-ink spilled over the history of dating the house which appears to be unnecessary detail to go into."took over his inheritance upon coming of age"
->"was old enough to control his inheritance"
. A bit of archaic language being used throughout, which is charming, but can be more complex than it needs to be.- "coming of age" is the technical term, with legal connotations. ~ Pbritti (talk) 02:00, 31 July 2024 (UTC)
"constructed in 1752–1753"
constructed in or constructed between?- Writing out Philip Ludwell III's full name every time: after "the year Philip Ludwell III took over his inheritance upon coming of age"he can simply be referred to as Ludwell.
"In 1755, Philip Ludwell III was advertising the house for renters"
-> "by 1755"?"the "brick house", as it was identified in correspondence,"
too much detail", though these efforts were not immediately successful"
redundant given following sentence.- Unclear what Note 6 adds.
- There is actually a minor implied discrepancy between some sources less intensely focused on the Paradises and those that offer general histories of Williamsburg's structures. I appended note 6 to head off concerns that might arise from sources that may implicitly dispute whether or not John Paradise actually resided in the home. It's something that only makes sense if you read more of the research, hence my relegation of the quote to a note. ~ Pbritti (talk) 01:58, 31 July 2024 (UTC)
correspondence between William Lee and Joseph Prentis indicate
this kind of attribution is only necessary if its contentious; instead of"By 1785, correspondence between William Lee and Joseph Prentis indicate Lee was again renting out the brick house, then to Louis Dormore; Lee's correspondence with Benjamin Waller in 1787 suggest that Dormore remained a tenant through 1786."
->By 1785, Lee was renting out the house to Louis Dormore, who remained a tenant through the following year.
almost ten years after her husband's death.
introduce that he died before referencing it."a mahogany table that had played host to Jefferson and Johnson"
That I am asking this reflects badly on me, but could you tell me how a table can host Jefferson and Johnson?- Idiomatically, items can play host. Both were guests who sat at the table at some point. I may rephrase when I have the relevant source in front of me. ~ Pbritti (talk) 20:44, 30 July 2024 (UTC)
- You're right, I was dumb. That being said... WP:IDIOM Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 16:17, 2 August 2024 (UTC)
- You're right. Please check if my fix of
at which both Jefferson and Johnson had sat
is sufficient. ~ Pbritti (talk) 20:08, 14 August 2024 (UTC)- Definitely better, but now that I'm coming back to this: I think it's a silly detail to include. Did she also bring the doormat that they dusted their shoes on? etc Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 02:17, 16 August 2024 (UTC)
- Dinner tables are fairly significant items at this point. It's notable when one is conveyed from Europe to the Americas in this period, doubly so that it hosted prominent figures on both sides of the Atlantic. ~ Pbritti (talk) 02:55, 17 August 2024 (UTC)
- Didn't mean to contest her bringing a dinner table, just the details added for colour. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 05:44, 17 August 2024 (UTC)
- Dinner tables are fairly significant items at this point. It's notable when one is conveyed from Europe to the Americas in this period, doubly so that it hosted prominent figures on both sides of the Atlantic. ~ Pbritti (talk) 02:55, 17 August 2024 (UTC)
- Definitely better, but now that I'm coming back to this: I think it's a silly detail to include. Did she also bring the doormat that they dusted their shoes on? etc Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 02:17, 16 August 2024 (UTC)
- You're right. Please check if my fix of
- You're right, I was dumb. That being said... WP:IDIOM Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 16:17, 2 August 2024 (UTC)
In one episode, she took guests to the unhitched carriage
Why was the previous sentence attributed as a rumour/claim and this one isn't/verifies it?- Done.
at the asylum that had held his grandmother
-> at the Williamsburg Public Hospital- Done.
Latin–when
what is this dash doing here?- Nothing good. I've removed it. ~ Pbritti (talk) 20:08, 14 August 2024 (UTC)
the home he was born in
WP:ELEGANT- Mulled replacing with "his birthplace", but went with
the house
. ~ Pbritti (talk) 20:08, 14 August 2024 (UTC)
- Mulled replacing with "his birthplace", but went with
Dessie Barziza would pass the home he was born in as he moved with other Confederate units during the day preceding the 1862 Battle of Williamsburg.
This seems like a trivial mention of the house, and unnecessary detail. In fact this whole paragraph appears to be excessive detail: why is there a biography of a man born in the house thrown into a history of a building? I think I haven't been canny enough with this: the history is of the building; not its occupants. If events are described, they should be relating to the house. I think I will leave it there as most of what I have reviewed and will review is impacted by this.- This is consistently remarked upon in histories of the house that consider its context in Williamsburg's history. The house is largely discussed elsewhere for its colonial narrative and restoration, but the sources that touch upon its late 19th-century developments linger on Decimus. ~ Pbritti (talk) 02:00, 16 August 2024 (UTC)
- Independent of whether histories of the house are mentioning it, do you think for Wikipedia the article is staying on topic by going into more biographical details of Decimus? I would say they are writing for different audiences. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 02:17, 16 August 2024 (UTC)
- Biographical details are relevant in the context of a house to a greater degree than in the context of other structures. I'll tighten that paragraph, but it's relevant material. ~ Pbritti (talk) 02:55, 17 August 2024 (UTC)
- I'm going to bring this to 3O, if only for my own edification for future reviews. I'll particularly bring their attention to a sentence I think exemplifies the issues I'm having: is
Dessie Barziza would pass the house as he moved with other Confederate units during the day preceding the 1862 Battle of Williamsburg
too much detail for a history of a house? Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 05:44, 17 August 2024 (UTC)
- I'm going to bring this to 3O, if only for my own edification for future reviews. I'll particularly bring their attention to a sentence I think exemplifies the issues I'm having: is
- Biographical details are relevant in the context of a house to a greater degree than in the context of other structures. I'll tighten that paragraph, but it's relevant material. ~ Pbritti (talk) 02:55, 17 August 2024 (UTC)
- Independent of whether histories of the house are mentioning it, do you think for Wikipedia the article is staying on topic by going into more biographical details of Decimus? I would say they are writing for different audiences. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 02:17, 16 August 2024 (UTC)
Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 11:23, 30 July 2024 (UTC)
- @Rollinginhisgrave: thank you for the review! I'll work through your comments when I can, but I will not be able to respond to this review in full this week. Expect some responses to most of your comments over the next 48 hours, but I do apologize if most of my replies don't appear until Monday of next week. ~ Pbritti (talk) 20:21, 30 July 2024 (UTC)
- No rush! Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 20:29, 30 July 2024 (UTC)
- I have not forgotten about this! Please bear with me, as I have a decent excuse (I'll message you privately to explain my situation if you'd like). I'll perform some corrections late today and early tomorrow UTC. ~ Pbritti (talk) 17:47, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
- No worries at all, I promise I'm not rushing you. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 18:05, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
- @Rollinginhisgrave: Back in America tomorrow; will get a lot done then. ~ Pbritti (talk) 21:45, 12 August 2024 (UTC)
- No worries at all, I promise I'm not rushing you. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 18:05, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
- I have not forgotten about this! Please bear with me, as I have a decent excuse (I'll message you privately to explain my situation if you'd like). I'll perform some corrections late today and early tomorrow UTC. ~ Pbritti (talk) 17:47, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
- No rush! Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 20:29, 30 July 2024 (UTC)
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