Talk:Who's That Girl (1987 film)/GA2

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Reviewer:--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me I think this article was unfairly failed last time. Editors weren't even given a chance. I don't think its fair for Legs to wait any longer :)--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 08:58, 29 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Ughh, dopnt call me Legs, as it is my wife uses that to tease me for my online name. — Legolas ^(talk2me) 09:27, 29 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I think "produced by WB" is better
Weird tense issues. Madonna played -> plays, was sent -> is sent
hometown Philadelphia -> of
wanted -> wants
capture the people who framed her, and both of them get caught -> doesn't flow well
till -> until
was on halt -> halted
eight years ago -> prior
grossing in total of US $25 million, by playing in front of an audience of 1.5 million. -> Its not "an" audience, its not only one show, its various happening at different times. Also, reword a bit
and Foley as a director -> and Foley's direction
first week -> opening

Done and copy-edited. It was 944 theatres, I re-checked. — Legolas ^(talk2me) 16:32, 11 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

characteristic look -> ?
- Made it better. — Legolas ^(talk2me) 16:32, 11 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
helps her find -> help
the mountain lion -> don't see how this fits in. I haven't heard anything about it before now. What significance does it hold?
- It is there in the first para itself. — Legolas ^(talk2me) 16:32, 11 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
There Nikki and Loudon -> there,
expresses -> express
Honestly, the last paragraph doesn't make much sense. I have not seen the film, and have a pretty good understanding until the last paragraph.
- Don't even make the mistake of watching the film if you don't wanna suicide. :) — Legolas ^(talk2me) 16:32, 11 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I don't see what purpose the free-media photo serves except eye-candy. It has no mention whatsoever in the section and really holds no significant importance, therefore failing I believe criteria 3a.
- It has mention in the filming and production section. A non-free image not necessarily has to be in that particular section, kinda like artwork and posters, even when their rationale and commentary may bein a separate section. And how can free-media images fail #3a? That is for NFCC, not commons. — Legolas ^(talk2me) 16:32, 11 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Madonna's 1986 studio album True Blue was a critical and commercial success, spawning five top-five singles, and selling over eight million copies worldwide, by the year-end -> don't see why this is necessary to include, but if you prefer it, then leave it, I won't stop you.
- This line I purposefully inserted, as I believe it presents a stark contrast against Madonna's successful singing career, and how pathetic her film career was. — Legolas ^(talk2me) 16:32, 11 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
as she wanted it to be -> she had hoped

celebration was planned -> planned makes it sound like it never happened, which it obviously did
Musically and technically superior -> how so musically?
huge -> I personally don't like the word huge
Madonna named the tour as Who's That Girl, when during rehearsals one-day she looked at a gigantic image of herself, projected on a screen on the stage -> I don't get it
U.S. -> US - MOS
audience -> audience members
was the second top female concert -> top selling

The film received mixed reviews from critics -> you wrote before it was a "critical failure"
First quote is a bit long. Should paraphrase or reduce bulk, or blockquote.

There you go Legolas, let me know when its all fixed :)--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 10:24, 11 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

- Others are done. Just check and revert back. — Legolas ^(talk2me) 16:32, 11 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]