Talk:2000 Atlantic hurricane season/GA3

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 00:21, 8 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I reviewed this article previously, so I'm still pretty familiar with it. It's really close to GA status.

From the previous GAN, one of the problems was that you lump Leslie in with other storms causing minimal damage in the lede, but then you highlight how much damage the precursor did. I suggest removing Leslie from the end of the first paragraph.
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 04:40, 12 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
For some reason, the "notes" section has a numbering problem.
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 04:40, 12 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
As with before - "However, La Niña was present it the Eastern Pacific, which was a factor in the activity in the season. " - again, not sure if "however" is appropriate."
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 04:40, 12 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"However, it quickly re-strengthened" - the antecedent is unclear, since the subject of the previous sentence is the upper-level low (this is in Alberto's section)
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 04:40, 12 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
You should mention in Alberto's section when the extratropical storm dissipated.
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 04:40, 12 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Given that ref 9 is in Mexican pesos, you should probably list the initial damage total for Beryl in pesos followed by USD in parenthesis. Maybe also indicate the website where it was converted in a note? Ditto with Keith. If you need help, I can help with this.
- This was fixed before you even wrote this review--12george1 (talk) 04:40, 12 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  - No, it should be something like what I do here. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 15:30, 12 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"and at least 300 people were affected by flooding in that country" - what does this mean?
- The source does not specify [1]--12george1 (talk) 04:40, 12 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  - So why did you include it then? --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 15:30, 12 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"Overall, the precursor system of Leslie resulted in about $950 million (2000 USD) in damage, slightly more than half of that figure was agriculture related." - there's a missing conjunction for the last clause. Either add a semicolon after damage, or change the "was" to "from" and cut the "related"
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 04:40, 12 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  - No, it's still wrong. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 15:30, 12 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"The low pressure area slowly formed a circulation" - I thought a LPA was a circulation? What happened here exactly?
- Rewrote; the NHC didn't even mention a circulation at that time--12george1 (talk) 04:40, 12 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
" satellite classifications using the Hebert-Poteat technique" - what is that? There is no link to it.
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 04:40, 12 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Remove the "2000" from TD 9's section.
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 04:40, 12 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Everything else is good though! --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 00:21, 8 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]