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GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:2019 Berlin Marathon/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Lee Vilenski (talk · contribs) 21:17, 20 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]


Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.

If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)

I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I may use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.

Best of luck! you can also use the {{done}} tag to state when something is addressed. Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs)

Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.

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Prose

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Lede

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  • The 2019 Berlin Marathon was the 46th edition of the annual marathon race held in Berlin, Germany, held on 29 September 2019. - lede sentences are supposed to be the best one, to explain what the article is about. This one leads on a bit. Repetition of "held". "The 2019 Berlin Marathon was a marathon race held in Berlin, Germany on 29 September 2019. This was the 46th edition of the Berlin Marathon...." would be much better. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 17:38, 24 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
    •  Done
  • The race was sponsored by the German automotive corporation BMW.[1] - do we need this citation? Is this not something we could put in the body? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 17:38, 24 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
    •  Done moved.
  • The lede is very short. Just covers that it is a race, and then who won. Could we not put some info, such as how long the course is (I know marathons are26 miles, but probably worth mentioning), where it starts and finishes, running conditions (weather, road types) etc.Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 17:38, 24 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
    • I couldn't find any details on the conditions of the race but I added a sentence about the location and length.
  • The lede not mentioning that the men's time was within two seconds of the World Record is criminal. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 17:50, 24 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
    • It was already included, you may have missed it.
  • The caption for the infobox image isn't great. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 17:50, 24 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
    •  Done

General

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  • The marathon distance is officially 42.195 kilometres (26.219 mi) long as sanctioned by the International Association of Athletics Federations (IAAF) now known as World Athletics. - is this debatable? Surely we can just say that the race is 42.195 km long, and the race was sanctioned by IAAF. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 17:49, 24 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
    • World Athletics is responsible for maintaining the standards of running and not the specific races. Also, I can't give any details on the exact length of the course as it could be longer than the marathon distance.
  • de:Justizvollzugsanstalt Moabit - not how we should do interlanguage links. See {{ill}}. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 17:49, 24 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
    •  Done
  • This probably needs an overview of the race, could easily be a part of course, which lists which governing bodies promoted the event, where and when it was set - the article doesn't even cite the date of the race. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 17:49, 24 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
    •  Done I couldn't find much information so I added the date of the race and the sponsors.
  • On that, we mention Mark Milde, we should also mention any other people involved with the running of the race. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 17:49, 24 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
    • I couldn't find anymore details on other people involved. Milde is worth mentioning because he is the son of the founder of the race and is closely associated with it.
  • "The favourite" for each event is a bit vague. According to whom? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 17:49, 24 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
    •  Done
  • Some of the runners have middle names on their articles. Any ideas why we are piping? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 17:49, 24 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Any idea why the women's results come first, but the infobox and results table has the men's results first? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 17:49, 24 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
    •  Done switched
  • Selly Chepyego Kaptich - we have her article at "Sally. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 17:49, 24 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
    •  Done
  • In the men's, Hug had pulled away from the other competitors by 5 kilometres (3.1 mi) and "cruised" through the rest of the race to win by over three and a half minutes in 1:28:09.[15][16] Weir finished second in 1:31:45, with Lakatos third, one second behind.[16]

In the men's race, the lead group went through 5 kilometres (3.1 mi) in 14:24 and 10 kilometres - are we talking about the same race twice? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 17:49, 24 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Review meta comments

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@Lee Vilenski: Thanks very much for the thorough review. I believe I've addressed and replied to all the comments. Kind regards, Willbb234Talk (please {{ping}} me in replies) 10:34, 26 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

No problem. I'll give it another read and see if there is anything else. Great work on the article, btw. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 09:49, 28 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]