Talk:A Toast to Men/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 08:31, 10 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

a song from American singer → I think "by" sounds better here

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

you should say here, as well as in the "Background" section that it fatured vocals from Lady Mary

Added. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Link "critics" to music journalism

Added. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox

flawless ;)

Thank you. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Background and composition

behind the lyrics, she said → say "confessed" here to avoid word repetition

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

and twelve seconds → 12 is above 10, so don't spell it out

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Release and promotion

was released as a digital download → replace "as a" with "for"

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

The song was promoted → state "the track" here to avoid repeition

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

sometime in the mid-2000s → this sounds very weird; if you don't have the exact date, I suggest removing this

Removed. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Link "radioplay" to airplay

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

of IGN, the record was → "record" is generally only used for albums, so state "recording" here

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Reception

and "add[ed[ fuel → syntax error

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

You can link the first paragraph with the second one if you like

I would prefer to keep it separate as the first paragraph is covering the critical reception while the second one is covering commercial performance. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Formats and track listings

You can remove "Formats and" to keep the section name simple

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

EP → Digital EP

If you look at the Amazon.com reference, then you will see that there was a CD single for the EP so "Digital EP" would not be an accurate title. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Credits and personnel

flawless ;)

Thank you. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Charts

I fixed the table here

Thank you. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Release history

Fixed things here as well

Thank you. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Unlink formats please

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Other stuff

Copy-violation

47.9%; maybe you can reword some things?

Revised. Thank you for pointing this out. Hopefully this fixes it. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Links

No problems here!

Thank you. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

References

As far as I checked them, the references do cover the assertations made in this article
No dead links! Good job!

Thank you. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Outcome

Putting this On hold for 7 days. Great job with the article; Cartoon network freak (talk) 12:34, 10 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for the review. I will make the corrections on Monday if that is okay with you as I have a busy weekend. Aoba47 (talk) 15:57, 10 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Cartoon network freak: Thank you for your review. I believe that I have covered all of the points raised above. Let me know if there is anything else that I can do to improve the article. Thank you again. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Passing this; congrats!! Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 19:20, 12 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

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