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GA Review

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Reviewer: Kavyansh.Singh (talk · contribs) 07:06, 7 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Nominator: Chiswick Chap (talk · contribs) at 15:36, 14 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Many thanks for taking this on. I'll respond promptly to any questions. Chiswick Chap (talk) 08:52, 7 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

GA criteria

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GA review
(see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):
    b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):
    b (citations to reliable sources):
    c (OR):
    d (copyvio and plagiarism):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):
    b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
    b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

Overall:
Pass/Fail:

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Comments

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Prose

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  • The article has three paragraphs in the lead. Just one would be sufficient, given the length of the article. Suggesting to merge the paragraphs
    • Done.
  • Lead: Animals achieve active camouflage both by color change and (among marine animals such as squid) by counter-illumination v. Prose: There are two mechanisms of active camouflage in animals: Counter-illumination, and color change — any reason for change in order or "Counter-illumination" and "color change"
    • Harmonised.
  • "a wide range of background textures" — the prose does not make clear where this quote comes from
    • Repeated ref for clarity.
  • Lead: during World War II v. Prose: Second World War — consistency needen
    • Fixed.
  • of the United States of America — should be "of the United States"
    • Fixed.
  • OLEDs is never used again in the prose. Do we need to specify the acronym?
    • Gone.
  • Same with PAO
    • Gone.

That is it! – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 16:28, 8 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Images

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  • 1 non-free image is appropriately licenced.
    • Noted.

References

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  • Retrieved March 27, 2012 v. Retrieved 2017-01-09 — inconsistent date format
    • Fixed.
  • Ref#27 — 2006 is repeated twice
    • Fixed.
  • Ref#15 — bare url?
    • Formatted.
  • 1046–8 — better would be "1046–1048"
    • Done.

That is it. Putting on hold. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 16:35, 8 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Kavyansh.Singh – Many thanks for the review. Chiswick Chap (talk) 17:01, 8 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

There is still lot of inconsistencies in date formats in the references. Almost half are in "YYYY-MM-DD" format, while others are in "DD Month, YYYY" format. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 17:56, 8 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
@Kavyansh.Singh: – Checked and formatted all of them. Chiswick Chap (talk) 19:08, 8 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Great, promoting! – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 19:22, 8 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]