Talk:Bergdorf Goodman Building/GA2

GA Review

Passed. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 22:26, 16 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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Nominator: Epicgenius (talk · contribs) 00:44, 19 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Rollinginhisgrave (talk · contribs) 03:57, 5 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this. It's been a bit over a month since I've reviewed one of yours, and although my plan to get some variety in reviewers has fallen through in this case, I'm happy to review this over the next few days. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 03:57, 5 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry for the delay, I'll get to the rest of this over the next few hours. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 07:31, 12 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

All done! Looking good, a few things to review. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 02:16, 13 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Prose and content

Wikilinks: milliner
- Done. Epicgenius (talk) 19:55, 16 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Gloss: Steuben Glass, Daniel Boulud
- Done. Epicgenius (talk) 19:55, 16 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
The Mutual Life Insurance Company took over the buildings at a foreclosure auction in 1934. This is a bit confusing. I understand that the site contained several "structures" at this point. But in the next sentence Bergdorf Goodman "expanded its store into the entire building."
- I have clarified this. At the time, the building was still composed of several distinct storefronts. Epicgenius (talk) 19:55, 16 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
The design ~~of the building~~ was intended to evoke the architecture
- Done. Epicgenius (talk) 19:55, 16 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
The land lot is mostly rectangular approximately rectangular?
- One could say that, yes. The northern half of the lot extends ever so slightly further west than the southern half. Epicgenius (talk) 19:55, 16 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Alice Vanderbilt requested permission to sell the Vanderbilt Mansion could you say why she needed permission?
- I've clarified as to why she needed permission (basically, she didn't own the house outright, she only had a life estate). Epicgenius (talk) 19:55, 16 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
~~Mrs.~~ Vanderbilt's request
- I've removed this by rewording the sentence. Epicgenius (talk) 19:55, 16 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Bergdorf Goodman also offered to buy the rest of the Vanderbilt site outright But keep renting the corner structure?
- Actually, the store offered to buy the entire property, including the corner structure Epicgenius (talk) 19:55, 16 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
For the next several decades, the Fifth Avenue building would remain Bergdorf Goodman's only location. WP:WOULDCHUCK
- Done. Epicgenius (talk) 19:55, 16 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
~~View of~~ the northern end
- Done. Epicgenius (talk) 19:55, 16 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Thomas E. Greacen II redesigned that storefront had the storefront redesigned. Don't need to mention Thomas E. Greacen II's name, unless he's notable.
- Done. Epicgenius (talk) 19:55, 16 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Tailored Woman announced that it would close its store at 742 Fifth Avenue. when?
- Added. Epicgenius (talk) 19:55, 16 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
The plans included adding a new entrance This kind of "it was announced" / "the plans included" content is inferior to just saying a new entrance was added, as long as it is reasonable to believe that there weren't issues (on the correct side of SYNTH). This seems to fall in that bucket as you mention a few sentences later that, indeed, a new entrance did open up.
- I've reworded this. As far as I know, no significant changes were made to the plans after they were announced. Epicgenius (talk) 19:55, 16 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Goodman leased the building to Broadway-Hale and continued to live in his penthouse apartment atop the building introduce that Goodman was living in this apartment. As far as I can tell, it was only mentioned that his father had lived there.
- Done. Epicgenius (talk) 19:55, 16 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Bergdorf Goodman announced in 1981... this paragraph has the same "it was announced" issues, and skirts into WP:WOULDCHUCK
- In this case, the renovation was only announced in 1981; work didn't begin until the next year. Epicgenius (talk) 19:55, 16 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
warehouse in Queens, WP:CINS
- I have reworded this. Epicgenius (talk) 19:55, 16 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Suggestions

linen shop Mosse Inc false title
- Oops, I've fixed this. Epicgenius (talk) 19:55, 16 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
6.075 million template:inflation
- I've converted this to use Template:US$, which incorporates inflation conversions automatically. Epicgenius (talk) 19:55, 16 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I might have missed it, but can you mention when Edwin Goodman dies?
- Done. Epicgenius (talk) 19:55, 16 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
which sold teenage girls' clothing a bit clumsy, can you write clothing for teenage girls ?
- Done. Epicgenius (talk) 19:55, 16 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
mansard roof don't need to link this again in the next line.
- Removed the link. Epicgenius (talk) 19:55, 16 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
each ranging from 6 to 8 stories MOS:NUMERAL
- Fixed. Epicgenius (talk) 19:55, 16 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Redlink Angela Cummings, she certainly appears notable
- Done. Epicgenius (talk) 19:55, 16 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Sources

[25] Y
[50] Y Though this article is claiming Brown bought the house in 1923.
- This is contradicted by contemporary sources, which indicate that the Vanderbilt house wasn't even placed on sale until 1925. As such, I didn't think an explanatory footnote was necessary. Epicgenius (talk) 19:55, 16 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
[75] Y
[101] Y
[125] Y
[150] Y
[176] Y
[200] Y
[225] clock I think this is a stronger claim than the source is making
- Oops. I have reworded this to clarify that only the sixth-floor renovation started at this time. Epicgenius (talk) 19:55, 16 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
[250] Y
[275] Y

Other

Images all appropriately tagged Y (it is a shame there aren't images of the interior / window displays)
No issues with COPYVIO / OR Y (earwig 36.3%, locations)
Broad / summary style Y
Neutral Y
Stable Y

Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 02:16, 13 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Oops, I missed this. I'll fix these shortly. – Epicgenius (talk) 19:31, 16 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Rollinginhisgrave, sorry for the late responses. I have now addressed all the issues you've brought up. – Epicgenius (talk) 19:56, 16 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Looking great, passing Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 22:25, 16 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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