Talk:Bushy Park (New Zealand)/GA1
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Nominator: Marshelec (talk · contribs) 07:56, 8 August 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Jens Lallensack (talk · contribs) 22:54, 7 October 2024 (UTC)
- In 1880, an area of 391 hectares (966 acres) inland from Kai Iwi was transferred from Uru Te Angina to James Moore for £483 – What is Uru Te Angina? Can you include a hint?
- The meaning of tarapuruhi is "place of abundant bird life" – Can it be stated which language this is?
- Avoid single sentence paragraphs and very short paragraphs. Where possible, combine to a congruent text.
- The structure seems suboptimal. Maybe you can group "Homestead" and "Visitor Centre", as these sections seem a bit out of place at the moment? Maybe under "Facilities"? The sentence "A network of ten forest paths traverses the forest reserve" could go there as well, as it does not really fit under "Flora".
- "bird sanctuary" is potentially misleading, because searching for it leads to Animal sanctuary, which says that "An animal sanctuary is a facility where animals are brought to live and to be protected for the rest of their lives", and I don't think that's what you mean here. Please make the meaning clear, maybe just a wikilink is enough.
- North Island robin (toutouwai) were introduced to the sanctuary in 2000, with an initial population of 28 birds. – If possible, some more context here would be good. Why were these introduced? The lead says "re-introduced", so did they went extinct at some point, and why?
- The stitchbird (hihi) has a conservation status of 'nationally vulnerable'. – Not only nationally; it is globally vulnerable according to the ICZN.
- sugar-water, volunteer-hours – I think these should not have a hypen.
- Kai Iwi – should be linked in body again.
- You cover pest animal control, but source 30 also says something about weed control, which could be added, too.
- Wikilinking the bird names in the gallery would help.
- I do not see issues with the sourcing, and spot checks did not uncover close paraphrasing or unsourced information. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 00:19, 8 October 2024 (UTC)
Response @Jens Lallensack: Thank you for the review - I greatly appreciate the time and thought you have put into this. I believe I have actioned the points listed above, other than the point about the term "bird sanctuary". The term "Bird sanctuary" in Wikipedia currently redirects to Animal sanctuary, and that the description implies that the animals are captive within the boundaries. This cannot apply to birds unless the birds are flightless, or the sanctuary is an enclosed aviary. In New Zealand, the term "sanctuary" has been used for describing many nature reserves protected by pest-exclusion fences that have been established for purposes including bird conservation. Locations include Brook Waimārama Sanctuary, Orokonui Ecosanctuary, Sanctuary Mountain Maungautatari, Zealandia (wildlife sanctuary), Mount Tutu Eco-Sanctuary, Wharariki Ecosanctuary. The use of the term sanctuary to describe the protected area of Bushy Park is consistent with New Zealand usage, and I prefer to retain it. However, I acknowledge that the article is for an international audience. Perhaps the problem is with the redirect, and the lack of a specific article about protected areas for birds within a pest-exclusion fence, or a description of that kind of sanctuary within the Animal sanctuary or Nature reserve articles. What do you suggest ?_Marshelec (talk) 20:32, 8 October 2024 (UTC)
- No worries, I would say leave it as is, it is only a very minor issue. Thank you for your improvements. I am promiting this now; congrats! --Jens Lallensack (talk) 20:56, 8 October 2024 (UTC)