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GA Review

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Reviewer: Parsecboy (talk) 12:51, 19 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]


GA review (see here for criteria)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS):
    In the 1914-1929 section, you say that the ship was placed in reserve in 1920 but then conducted a cruise of China in 1919. This should be in chronological order.
    Done. Cam (Chat)(Prof) 16:26, 19 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]
    I think there are some Engvar issues; ex: armour but demilitarization.
    I'll do my best to fix these. Canadian English is really a bastardized hybrid between AmEng and BritEng, which makes copyediting a pain. Cam (Chat)(Prof) 16:26, 19 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]
    Yeah, I know Canadian English is sort of a mix of the two, but I wasn't sure what was what. Parsecboy (talk) 17:40, 19 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]
    The last para is really long, could you split that somewhere?
    I was thinking the same thing yesterday. I'll try and find somewhere where it can be split. Cam (Chat)(Prof) 16:26, 19 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]
    Oh, I had thought of this during my initial review but then forgot to list it here. You should link to armor-piercing shot and shell in the armament section. Parsecboy (talk) 17:40, 19 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]
    I guess there's no reason I couldn't do this myself. Parsecboy (talk) 17:43, 19 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
    There are a couple fact tags that need to be fixed - should be no problem though.
    Fact tags have been fixed. Cam (Chat)(Prof) 16:26, 19 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
    You might want to explain the bit about sinking the Imperator Nikolai I though (i.e,. explain that it had been taken into Japanese service and then sunk as a target). I imagine it's not clear now to non-experts what was going on there.
    Alright. I've added a bit. Cam (Chat)(Prof) 16:26, 19 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]
    You should spell out the connection between WWI and the Washington Treaty (people might read it and think "what? WWI was over 5 years before the WNT"). Also add when the treaty was signed (a year is fine, I think).
    Done. Cam (Chat)(Prof) 16:26, 19 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]
    I expect this is a typo, but in the demilitarization section, you say "at the end of November 1939. On 24 April 1930," That should be November 1930, right?
    November 1929. Not sure what that 3 was doing in there...Cam (Chat)(Prof) 16:26, 19 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]
    I'm always amazed at the seemingly obvious typos I continually make... Parsecboy (talk) 17:40, 19 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
    Is there a source for File:HieiB17Nov13.gif - anyone should be able to tell it's a USAF photo, but it'd be nice to have the source.
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:
    Not too much to do here before I'll pass the article for GA. Excellent work. Parsecboy (talk) 12:51, 19 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]