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Reviewer: Therapyisgood (talk · contribs) 23:08, 2 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Will look at this shortly. Therapyisgood (talk) 23:08, 2 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

  • Lucroy began catching during his Little League Baseball career odd to call "Little League Baseball" a "career"
    • Reworded.
  • he became the face of the franchise after Ryan Braun was implicated in the Biogenesis scandal. this is an extraordinary claim that requires a citation in the lead
    • Added.
  • Lucroy also collected a number of honors no need for "also"
    • Removed.
  • Umatilla High School officially retired no need for "officially"
    • Removed.
  • Archive on ref 8 leads to OS home page.
    • Replaced.
  • where his RBI-leading performance team or league?
    • League. Specified.
  • There is no need to use the open access template on newspapers.com references, it's not really open source. I wouldn't use anything on them.
    • Removed all.
  • That summer, Lucroy returned to the FCSL, this time helping no need for "this time"
    • Removed.
  • while Louisiana–Lafayette clinched a spot in the 2007 NCAA Division I Baseball Tournament.[24] While two "whiles" too close together.
    • Removed second.
  • Following his breakout 2008 season no need for "breakout"
    • Removed entire phrase.
  • blowout loss no need for "blowout"
    • Removed.
  • how did the Brewers finish the 2012 season?
    • Added.
  • a potentially season-ending injury, not sure this is needed.
    • Removed.
  • Bryan Holaday and Bobby Wilson, who had been platooning explain what "platooning" is in parenthesis.
    • I don't believe this is necessary, as the term is linked. Specified that they were platooning the position, though.
  • to bolster a starting lineup entirely in their 20s. starting pitching lineup or starting batting lineup?
    • Mostly pitching, but as their starting catcher was 25, I reworded.
  • reporters,"We're all running together. space after comma
    • Done.
  • while throwing out 26 percent of attempted base runners a note on how this compares to other catchers in MLB would be appreciated.
    • I have not been able to find a source that I would consider reliable on this without delving into OR territory, as the number fluctuates fairly regularly.
  • backstop → catcher
    • Changed.
  • on July 29 in order to make room no need for "in order"
    • Removed.
  • "Washington Nationals (2021)" this header should really be "Philadelphia Phillies, Chicago White Sox and Washington Nationals (2021)"
    • Replaced, although I personally disagree, as he never appeared in games for the other two teams.
  • In "Oakland Athletics": link "40-man roster"
    • Done.
  • he did make a brief postseason appearance this can be confusing to people who really don't know baseball when you say he made a "postseason appearance" but he didn't actually play for any teams.
    • Reworded.
  • Location used in ref 17 but not elsewhere.
    • It is used there to distinguish the Opelousas Daily World from the ones in Vancouver, Aberdeen, Atlanta, and Greene County. I added the location in the one other source where the Daily World is cited, but feel no need to add it to sources like, say, the Milwaukee Journal Sentinel.

Therapyisgood I am working on your comments. Been having some physical health issues that limit my screen time. Shouldn't take me more than a few days. Thank you for picking up this review. — GhostRiver 19:12, 10 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Therapyisgood I have responded to all of your comments. — GhostRiver 17:45, 11 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]