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A few notes

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  1. I think the lead needs rewriting. The second sentence is just a bit too long, and what is missing is the "afterwards"--1986 was a long time ago (I miss it very much--I had a Sony DD2, and weighed 20 pounds less). The lead should summarize the entire article; now there isn't all that much after 1986, but still; and I think the change of the call sign needs to be made explicit in there. Do not be afraid to make a (boring) chronological summary.
  2. I am not sure what a "competitive hearing" is.
  3. Haha, I was going to say that maybe the proposed hook was a tad strong but WTF? people said this? On the f***ing radio?? Ha, thanks for not sweeping that under the rug.
  4. I think I know what you mean with "The Babbs's rejection of the value of money resulted in them refusing to pay their 1981 property taxes"--they were some crazy anti-gubbermint couple, I suppose, but that bears spelling out a bit more, by restating what is now the subject of the sentence as a complete independent clause, for instance. BTW what they rejected, I assume, wasn't the value of money, but money in general.
  5. "they were garnished for the station's actions"--unclear what that means.
  6. "a volume of mail" can be more clearly quantified. "a ton" is probably too colloquial, but "volume" doesn't really work.
  7. "Aside from the racist programs" is maybe not technically a dangling modifier, but it isn't elegant. Please find a parallel with "local residents claimed".
  8. the suspicious accident warrants a few more words.
  9. "they returned in late September"--who "they" is is not clear; the closest antecedent is the two broadcasts that were dropped.
  10. Oh, you need to make clear that the Babbses "are" Cattle Country, at least until their divorce (?).
  11. So, if I understand it correctly (the final paragraphs are packed), the thing died in 1986? "this application was supported" isn't the most clear way of stating that.
  12. Finally, I think it would be a good idea to divide that lengthy history section into some subsections; the renewal, the relaunch, and the demise are maybe good points for divisions.

Sorry, this is a lot of commentary, but the article is worth it. Thanks, Drmies (talk) 17:32, 13 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@Drmies: Here are my replies to a couple of these that are harder to fix or improve...
  1. A "comparative hearing" is a type of FCC hearing (not used since 1993) in which applications for a given frequency would be considered together and the FCC would make a decision. Comparative hearings were very common when multiple applicants sought the same frequency, as happened with KTTL.
  2. It's not clear what the garnishment is in the original source, to be honest.
I hope these and the edits I just made help address these concerns Raymie (tc) 19:08, 13 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]