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Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment

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This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): BCeba002.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 19:06, 17 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Civil Constitution of the Clergy Outline

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Looks great! It is very thorough and easy to understand. The only suggestion I have is that I saw two places where you introduced a point with States that... -- I would suggest deleting that, because isn't it implicit that everything you've listed in the outline is stated in the Civil Constitution of the Clergy? Aaannnnnnaaa (talk) 02:12, 5 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

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This article needs a lead section explaining what this "article" (more of a copypaste than an article) is about, and putting it into context. Currently, a reader coming across this page would have no idea whatsoever what it refers to. - Arjayay (talk) 09:36, 14 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I agree with Arjayay. Please make sure you make this into an actual article rather than a listing of the document. @BCeba002: Alfgarciamora (talk) 17:29, 20 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Thank you both for providing feed back. I have gone ahead and created a brief lead section which gives a broad overview of the topic. I also put in the template "Main Article" which will inform users that this page is based on the Civil Constitution of the Clergy article. @Arjayay: will you please review the lead section and let me know if it puts the article into better context? Please feel free to update the language to make it sound more encyclopedic. Thanks! BCeba002 (talk) 04:33, 26 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Hi BCeba002 - I have edited the lead as requested - the problem with such explanations is avoiding an "essay style" and/or addressing the reader. Please modify it further if you think I have misunderstood, or under/over emphasised any part. - Arjayay (talk) 12:02, 26 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Arjayay, the lead section looks great! Thank you for your help! Have a great day! BCeba002 (talk) 15:21, 26 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]