Talk:Polistes japonicas

Recommendations

Good job on your article! I felt like you had some great, reliable sources from which you synthesized your information. I think your work was presented in a comprehensive manner. The picture of your wasp also provides a great visual. I helped edit your conservation status and changed the format to make it more consistent with other Wikipedia articles. It now has the circle format! For future revisions, I think you could add more to the section of Taxonomy and Phylogeny. The following paper has information regarding the subfamily Polistinae which might help provide more information for this section: Arevalo, Elisabeth; Yong Zhu; James M Carpenter; Joan E Strassman (2004). "The phylogeny of the social wasp subfamily Polistinae: evidence from microsatellite flanking sequences, mitochondrial COI sequence, and morphological characters". BioMedCentral Evolutionary Biology 4 (8). Retrieved 22 September 2014. Furthermore, I edited some of the sentence structure within the Queen section to make it flow a bit better. Also, this section might fit better under the category of Behavior. You could maybe add a subcategory of Dominance Behavior. There are also other sources that could support this like maybe this article: Ishikawa, Yoshihiro, et al. "Polistes japonicus (Hymenoptera, Vespidae) queens monopolize ovipositing but are not the most active aggressor in dominant-subordinate interactions." Insectes sociaux 58.4 (2011): 519-529. I also took out some unnecessary commas and added in a few transition words throughout the rest of your article. For the section of Colony Behavior, there seemed to be one sources for a large portion of this section. Maybe try to find another article that also gives some insight to get a wider perspective on this topic? Also, it seemed like you started the sections of Brood Care and Diet. The information there looks great, but I think you could improve your article by adding more information so people can gain a better understanding of Polistes japonicas.Daphne Deng (talk) 11:46, 19 October 2014 (UTC)

Some suggestions

The article provides a pretty good overview of the wasp, but i think this article in general lacks a considerable amount of depth and detail- The sections ‘Colony Cycle’ and ‘Brood Care’ (and 'the Behavior' section) could definitely benefit from more information. I also recommend adding more information on the ‘Overall description’ section so it could give a more comprehensive overview of the species in the beginning of the article; as of now, it only has one sentence saying that it is a eusocial wasp found in East Asian regions, so I would briefly add more information on its phenotypic characteristics, nest structure, and other interesting behavior activities. Additionally, I edited some colloquially written sentences in the ‘Description and Identification’ section (some sentences in the ‘Queen’ subsections were especially confusing, so I fixed the sentence structure so it would have more clarity), and have also rearranged and rewritten some sentences in other sections so they would overall have a better flow. Lastly, the article currently has only two subsections under the ‘Behavior’ section, so I would add a few more subsections so the readers would have a better understanding of wasp’s characteristic behavioral activities. I think the article as of now is a solid start to being a comprehensive account of this wasp, so I would definitely improve this draft by adding a few more detailed, in-depth information under various sections. JackieOh0223 (talk) 22:45, 20 October 2014 (UTC)