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Did you know nomination

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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by AirshipJungleman29 talk 18:50, 31 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Created by PCN02WPS (talk). Self-nominated at 23:54, 6 March 2024 (UTC). Post-promotion hook changes for this nom will be logged at Template talk:Did you know nominations/Robert L. McLeod; consider watching this nomination, if it is successful, until the hook appears on the Main Page.[reply]

  • Thank you PCN02WPS for two well-written articles. Both articles were recently expanded 5x, well-written and within policy. No image so no problem there. No qpq's have been done, so that needs to be addressed. Furthermore, I find the hook in its present form a bit lacking. I imagine that an arrangement of having two co-presidents of colleges are not extremely rare; at least it does not strike the reader immediately as something particularly intriguing. However, the reason they were co-presidents is that one of them was serving onboard an aircraft carrier in the Pacific Ocean during World War II. That is actually quite unexpected an interesting. Could perhaps the hook be elaborated a bit, to tease the reader into reading the articles, using this fact? I think there are options here. Let me know what you think. Kind regards, Yakikaki (talk) 19:03, 8 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

We are in WP:QPQ backlog mode. Double reviews are required.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 06:53, 17 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]


GA Review

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The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.


This article was promoted by 750h+ 10:47, 5 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

This review is transcluded from Talk:Robert J. McMullen/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Nominator: PCN02WPS (talk · contribs) 21:55, 4 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: 750h+ (talk · contribs) 05:10, 31 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Starting review. 750h+ 05:10, 31 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

prose

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Feel free to refuse my suggestions with proper justification of course.

lead
  • he was licensed to preach in April 1909 and soon after left the country
  • president for a four-year term ==> "president for four years"
  • its lone president until the following October i would just say "its lone president until October 1946"
early life and education
  • I would merge the two paragraphs. There's also quite a lot of usage of "He" rather than his last name.
career
  • During his presidency he delivered for consistency with the entire article, add a comma after "presidency"
personal life and death

No problems here

image and source review

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  • Source review and spot check checks out (as long as "Presbyterian Heritage Center at Montreat" is a reliable source) and article's images look fine; all are public domain. 750h+ 13:15, 3 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

verdict

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Excellent small article. Placing on hold. 750h+ 13:15, 3 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@750h+ All taken care of. As for using "he" instead of his last name, I don't see a problem with that since the subject doesn't change in that paragraph and I don't want to be repetitive with use of his name. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 20:28, 4 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Seems fine. Passing . 750h+ 10:46, 5 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.