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Feedback from New Page Review process

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I left the following feedback for the creator/future reviewers while reviewing this article: Thank you for starting the article. Please continue to develop it.

Bruxton (talk) 05:05, 27 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Did you know nomination

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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Lightburst talk 16:59, 18 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

  • ... that the a 2024 film documents the journey of becoming a Blue Angel?
Created by VeniceBreeze (talk) Cielquiparle (talk) and Bruxton (talk). Number of QPQs required: 1. Nominator has 151 past nominations.

Bruxton (talk) 21:39, 27 May 2024 (UTC).[reply]

  • Article looks to be new and long enough. Looks to be well-sourced as far as I can tell. QPQ is done. I think the hook is just missing some context for readers with no outside knowledge. (For example, the language in the article lead uses the phrase "the Blue Angel pilots of the United States Navy".) Either hook can potentially work, and it will become a question of length. Shooterwalker (talk) 16:26, 31 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Hello. Bruxton asked me to stop by and offer some ALT hooks, so here you go. At the very least, perhaps they inspire more hooks.
I have modified the article accordingly to support these hooks. Cielquiparle (talk) 03:43, 4 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks @Cielquiparle: pinging the reviewer Shooterwalker. Bruxton (talk) 03:58, 4 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
These all have potential! The best one for clarity is ALT3, because it makes it clear that this relates to jet pilots. But it would be a little better if it made it clear that this is about a film. The others (particularly ALT4 and ALT5) aren't clear on this fact. They could all be made clear with just a little more context (e.g.: the film is about jet pilots), because I think that some of the others are more interesting. Any of them can be made to work with a little more tweaking. Shooterwalker (talk) 02:22, 6 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Giving a ping to keep the discussion moving. @Cielquiparle: @Bruxton: Shooterwalker (talk) 02:19, 11 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@Shooterwalker: Sorry I was called away for a few days. There are 8 hooks, can you approve any? I prefer to have less info in the hook, and a promotor will also choose the hook they like and or tweak. Bruxton (talk) 03:56, 11 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
That's okay. Let's work with ALT3, with some modifications:
Just to make it clear that the article is about a film. (The hook is also good because it gives a sense of what the film is about -- jet pilots.) Does that work for you? Shooterwalker (talk) 16:10, 12 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@Shooterwalker: Thank you much, can you give it a green tick? Bruxton (talk) 20:07, 12 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Glad we could figure it out. ALT3b is approved. Shooterwalker (talk) 19:42, 13 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
ALT5 seems the most interesting to me and it is confirmed and in the article. Seems we already ran the first female on DYK and firsts are getting too much scrutiny lately. Lightburst (talk) 16:58, 18 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]