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User:DerekE9831/Trevor David Rhone/MachInX19 Peer Review

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Team Trevor Rhone

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User:DerekE9831/Trevor David Rhone
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Lead

The Lead paragraph is good. It introduces Trevor, and his achievements. It's short and to-the-point as well.

Content

The content here is good. the article is fairly relevant, and it all flows together.

Tone and Balance

I don't feel any bias coming from this article. It's well-written and neutral. The one thing I'd say is the furthest from this standpoint is when Rhone credits his passion to his High School days, but that doesn't matter much in this context. Everything here is fine.

Sources and References

These sources aren't bad. They reflect the articles decently but maybe spread your references out. I noticed that your first two sources, the APS and RPI articles, are used a lot in this article. Not saying it's a bad thing, but maybe add more from your other sources. Aside from that, your article looks good in this regard. While they're older, the sources used for Rhone's Family are fine for their purposes. Everything else looks up-to-date.

Organization

Your Article is quick, clean, and to the point. Everything is presented clearly, and the sections are easy to understand. The Article seems alright in terms of Grammar also.

Overall Impressions

This Article is nice and informative. Everything is relevant and up-to-date, but you should add more from your sources. Like I said earlier, your first two sources are used quite a bit compared to, say, your 5th and 6th sources. That is the only 'issue' I see from the article. Aside from that it's a solid work.