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Hello, Ashitakarl, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Shalor and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 19:02, 19 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Notes

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Hi! I wanted to drop you a few quick notes on your sections of the draft.

  • The lead paragraph doesn't need to have a header. I don't know if this was something that you put in to make it easier to divvy up sections, but I wanted to let you know that the lead paragraphs don't have headers.
  • When listing names, make sure that you give the person's full name the first time they're mentioned, as there can be multiple people by the same last name, making it hard to tell who you're referring to.
  • With the header/lead, you don't really need to go into a lot of specific detail in the header as far as the definition is concerned. This portion is supposed to be more of a general overview, so you may want to take the more specific definition material and create a section that specifically covers the issues dealing with definitions. I've changed the position of the terminology and definition header to reflect this.
  • Be careful with wording/tone when writing. In specific, make sure that it doesn't read as too casual or too much like an essay or paper. You also want to make sure that the work doesn't have anything that could be seen as an opinion. This can sometimes be tricky, as phrases like "it is believed" and even statements that one version of a test is simpler than another can come across as opinions. One of the easiest ways to deal with this is to attribute the content via methods like "According to..." and so on.
  • You may want to remove the list of 20 questions from the article. It's generally ok for the smaller lists, but this one is just too sizable for the article. You could tweak this to read like:
Young further extended her 8-question YDQ assessment to the now most widely used Internet Addiction Test (IAT), which consists of 20 items with each on a 5-point Likert scale. Questions included on the IAT expand upon Young's earlier 8-question assessment in greater detail and include questions such as "Do you become defensive or secretive when anyone asks you what you do online?" and "Do you find yourself anticipating when you go online again?".
This gets the general point across but without the longer list.


These are the main things I wanted to point out. You've done well so far and these are more on the specific end, but hopefully they won't take too long to work on. Good job! Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 18:03, 28 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]