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Your submission at Articles for creation: Habib migration (September 29)

Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed. Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reason left by SafariScribe was:

This submission's references do not show that the subject qualifies for a Wikipedia article—that is, they do not show significant coverage (not just passing mentions) about the subject in published, reliable, secondary sources that are independent of the subject (see the guidelines on the notability of events). Before any resubmission, additional references meeting these criteria should be added (see technical help and learn about mistakes to avoid when addressing this issue). If no additional references exist, the subject is not suitable for Wikipedia.

Please check the submission for any additional comments left by the reviewer. You are encouraged to edit the submission to address the issues raised and resubmit after they have been resolved.

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Safari Scribe^{Edits! Talk!} 20:34, 29 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@SafariScribe May i ask is it merely a referencing problem because references are rather limited Kerdasan hero (talk) 20:39, 29 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

No, the problem is that the sources doesn't show us how the draft meets WP:NEVENT. Safari Scribe^{Edits! Talk!} 20:43, 29 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@SafariScribe can i get a detail explanation to see how to do it exactly (i hope the wroting have nothing wrong) Kerdasan hero (talk) 20:45, 29 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Did you see how Japanese invasions of Korea (1592–1598) is detailed. While we appreciate WP:STUBS, we also look at the most possible outcome of it, if nominated for WP:AFD. We look at the lasting legacy and significance as a tribal dispute. Safari Scribe^{Edits! Talk!} 20:51, 29 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@SafariScribe thank you. i will try to change what us wrong. Kerdasan hero (talk) 20:53, 29 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Remember that there is no deadline as well as no rush to submit. Take much time, and make an outstanding research. Welcome once again to Wikipedia! Safari Scribe^{Edits! Talk!} 20:55, 29 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, Kerdasan hero! Having an article draft declined at Articles for Creation can be disappointing. If you are wondering why your article submission was declined, please post a question at the Articles for creation help desk. If you have any other questions about your editing experience, we'd love to help you at the Teahouse, a friendly space on Wikipedia where experienced editors lend a hand to help new editors like yourself! See you there! Safari Scribe^{Edits! Talk!} 20:34, 29 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Habib migration moved to draftspace

Thanks for your contributions to Habib migration. Unfortunately, I do not think it is ready for publishing at this time because it has too many problems of language or grammar and it does not maintain a neutral point of view. I have converted your article to a draft which you can improve, undisturbed for a while.

Please see more information at Help:Unreviewed new page. When the article is ready for publication, please click on the "Submit your draft for review!" button at the top of the page OR move the page back. —TechnoSquirrel69 (sigh) 16:48, 4 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@TechnoSquirrel69 can you help me with that. English isn't my first language and I do have a problem with being on point Kerdasan hero (talk) 15:57, 5 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hey Kerdasan hero, it's phrases like "Crushing the jawazi" or "The conflict, typical of the era, resulted in a victory" that raise concern regarding neutrality. The prose should not read like it has the editors' opinions inserted into to. While we're on the topic of copyediting, there are a handful of capitalization errors — proper nouns need to be capitalized on every use. There are also a lot of incomplete sentences that need rephrasing or incorporation into another sentence. Let me know if you have any questions about this. —TechnoSquirrel69 (sigh) 18:42, 5 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@TechnoSquirrel69 okay i will change those but please give me full list of sentences and words Kerdasan hero (talk) 20:25, 5 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I can't write the article for you, Kerdasan hero. The phrases above are examples of issues I found throughout the draft; it's now up to you to use that as a starting point to improve your overall writing. You can ask for feedback from other experienced editors at the Teahouse, but what you're requesting is a rather substantial commitment to reviewing that many people may not want to take up at this stage in the article's development. I'm happy to help if you have any other specific questions about this draft. —TechnoSquirrel69 (sigh) 20:43, 5 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]