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Your submission at Articles for creation: Sandy Hudson has been accepted

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Sandy Hudson, which you submitted to Articles for creation, has been created.

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Bkissin (talk) 17:30, 17 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Your submission at Articles for creation: Syrus Marcus Ware (August 18)

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Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed! Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reason left by ReaderofthePack was:  The comment the reviewer left was: Please check the submission for any additional comments left by the reviewer. You are encouraged to edit the submission to address the issues raised and resubmit when they have been resolved.
ReaderofthePack(formerly Tokyogirl79) (。◕‿◕。) 04:07, 18 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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Hello, Lauryndavis! Having an article declined at Articles for Creation can be disappointing. If you are wondering why your article submission was declined, please post a question at the Articles for creation help desk. If you have any other questions about your editing experience, we'd love to help you at the Teahouse, a friendly space on Wikipedia where experienced editors lend a hand to help new editors like yourself! See you there! ReaderofthePack(formerly Tokyogirl79) (。◕‿◕。) 04:07, 18 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Welcome!

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Hello, Lauryndavis, and welcome to Wikipedia! Thank you for your contributions.

I noticed that one of the first articles you edited appears to be dealing with a topic with which you may have a conflict of interest. In other words, you may find it difficult to write about that topic in a neutral and objective way, because you are, work for, or represent, the subject of that article. Your recent contributions may have already been undone for this very reason.

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  • Hi! Let me know on my talk page if you need any help! Offhand the biggest issue with the page is the tone, as it was written from a promotional, non-neutral point of view. If you're coming from a marketing background then this can be harder to pick up on since buzzwords and promotional terms are everyday things that you're used to using. There are also some issues with the sourcing, as some of it didn't back up the claims.
For example, you used a book published in 2014 to back up claims that Ware's article received widespread attention and controversy, however as the article was published in 2020 it won't be able to back up this claim. You also used the article itself for this, which also can't back up the claim of it being widely discussed and debated - you need independent, secondary sources for this. You also want to be careful about the size of the claim, as widespread can be kind of vague since people can have different opinions about what widespread actually means. (IE, it can mean a global or continental scale or it can mean widespread within academia, widespread on the Internet, and so on.) Offhand it looks like it has been discussed, however it doesn't seem like it received the level of discussion claimed in the draft. I don't see any coverage about controversy either, so at most we can say that Ware published an article but that's about it. We also need to be careful about listing article publications in the lead, as this is seen as fairly routine for scholars and activists. There can be a list in the publications section, but it should be limited to the most notable publications (ie, the ones that have received coverage) as otherwise a list can grow fairly long since it can be very common for some to publish a lot. (Some have 200+ articles!)
I am going to try to clean this up some and resubmit it, but I wanted to leave some notes to explain what I'm doing. ReaderofthePack(formerly Tokyogirl79) (。◕‿◕。) 04:19, 18 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Notes

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Here are a list of notes while I was editing:

  • I'm whittling down the lead. This should be a summary of the most majorly notable points of the article. To that end I removed mention of him being a twin, as this is something that isn't really vital-vital.
  • I removed the word "core" since that can be seen as a little promotional. Since he looks to have been a founding member, I'm using that term instead - it's more precise and also carries the implied importance of Ware for BLMT.
  • There's no true need to list academic history in the lead unless there's a lot of independent coverage for this, as it's seen as more of less routine. It's more vital to focus on things like Ware's activism, art, and books.

I may list more as I edit more. ReaderofthePack(formerly Tokyogirl79) (。◕‿◕。) 04:26, 18 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

More notes:

  • Do you have a list of Ware's upcoming books? We can list those in the bibliography section - I changed the publications section to a bibliography list type of section.
We can also list his most notable publications as well. He has a selected publications list so that may be good to use.

Your submission at Articles for creation: Syrus Marcus Ware has been accepted

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Syrus Marcus Ware, which you submitted to Articles for creation, has been created.

Congratulations, and thank you for helping expand the scope of Wikipedia! We hope you will continue making quality contributions.

The article has been assessed as C-Class, which is recorded on its talk page. This is a great rating for a new article, and places it among the top 21% of accepted submissions — kudos to you! You may like to take a look at the grading scheme to see how you can improve the article.

Since you have made at least 10 edits over more than four days, you can now create articles yourself without posting a request. However, you may continue submitting work to Articles for creation if you prefer.

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Thanks again, and happy editing!

ReaderofthePack(formerly Tokyogirl79) (。◕‿◕。) 06:04, 18 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]