User talk:Sachibenpatel/sandbox
Great contribution and terrific comments. I have nothing to add to the thoughtful reviews below - revise accordingly for Assignment 7 and let me know if you have any questions. Nice work!--Amille75 (talk) 05:44, 7 December 2015 (UTC)
General Comments: -- I think that the article is well written and covers your topic well -- I like how you have some headings to denote a change in context (i.e. uses) but I do think you could benefit from a distribution and maybe a few others as well. -- I think that you could do well to expand upon the uses content as well. I think it is important for this project and class assignment to do that.
Grammar: -- I see no issue with grammar -- Scientific names are stated correctly
References: -- You have 5 distinct references -- Each are from a scientific journal -- All are cited correctly
Overall: Really nice job! Jorf5 (talk) 19:22, 1 December 2015 (UTC)
General Comments:
- I thought the insights on Hordeum murinum were articulated well
- So what were the specific barriers involved with this genera?
- How is the tribe Triticea relevant to the understand of Hordeum murinum besides their general usage of the plant?
Grammar:
- Overall, the grammar and sentence structure for the article written are fine
- I would maybe recommend more subcategories to better enunciate differences in the text details
- Some sentences could be joined together through usage of commas, just something to be aware of to change the flow of the paragraphs
References:
- 5 references are listed
- Each one is from a distinguished scientific journal
- References are cited correctly
--Sgorukan (talk) 15:43, 1 December 2015 (UTC)sgorukan
General comments: ii. I learned a lot from your article! It helps how you began with general information such as germination time and where it can be found. I believe the “Uses” section of your article is most important. Do you think you can find more information that elaborates on how it is an important crop for some tribes? Mentioning that it’s used for animal feed is good, but the fact that Triticea people use it is very interesting! iii. I believe the article would be more easily understood if you had separate sections. For example, the second paragraph could be titled “Growth Requirements” or something along those lines. iv. Maybe the fourth paragraph can be moved before the third paragraph. This would help with the article’s flow because you then end with its uses after discussing subspecies, growth, etc. v. Overall, this was a good article. Why is the last sentence separated from any paragraph? It could probably fit into the subspecies section nicely. Grammar: vi. Your grammar is good. vii. You wrote all your scientific names correctly. References: viii. Good work with references. Reference 1 title may not need to be in all caps.