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Previous peer review

This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because the previous FAC failed. The article needs both a WP:MOS review and an WP:NFCC review. I hope to get both in one PR, but realize I may need to open a second dedicated review.

Thanks, TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 00:13, 29 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

did this help?-SCB '92 (talk) 17:10, 8 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Jivesh

 Doing... Jivesh Talk2Me 05:21, 9 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox
Lead
General comment on Lead: Please do not get me wrong but the lead is not a good one. You stress too much on cover versions

Guidelines for a lead (good one)

Do the pointers below apply to a song of this age and one with two really prominent versions? Looking at WP:FA and the 5 songs within 10 years in either direction from this song ("Hey Jude", "The Long and Winding Road", "What'd I Say", "Like a Rolling Stone", "Layla"), all but one of the WP:LEADs is only 2 paragraphs.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 20:58, 10 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

First paragraph:

  • Song, recording artist, album
  • who wrote it, produce it
  • Any information about background (was it originally for another artist, was it leaked....)
  • What motivated its development

Second paragraph

  • Genre(s) of song

Any influences or display of elements of other musical(s) genre(s)

  • characteristics (ballad, etc)
  • Did it gain any comparison?
  • What does the lyrical content refer to?

Third paragraph

  • What did critics say?
  • commercial reception?
  • Live performance

Fourth paragraph

  • Cover version

Jivesh Talk2Me 05:38, 9 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Fix these issues first. Quite a lot of work awaiting you. Jivesh Talk2Me 05:38, 9 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I will continue in a while. Jivesh boodhun (talk / Make sure you give 4 a try!!!) 04:12, 13 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Original version
Looks fine to me now. ★Jivesh 1205★ (talk / ♫♫Give 4 a try!!!♫♫) 10:32, 1 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Sorry. My mistake. ★Jivesh 1205★ (talk / ♫♫Give 4 a try!!!♫♫) 10:32, 1 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Good. ★Jivesh 1205★ (talk / ♫♫Give 4 a try!!!♫♫) 10:32, 1 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Okay. ★Jivesh 1205★ (talk / ♫♫Give 4 a try!!!♫♫) 10:32, 1 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Good. ★Jivesh 1205★ (talk / ♫♫Give 4 a try!!!♫♫) 10:32, 1 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Another excellent example of how Ray Charles was able to fuse blues and country, 'Here We Go Again' is a soulful ballad in the Southern blues tradition. Lyrically, it has a resignation and pain that makes the blues, simply, what it is. The recording has a simple and sterling gospel arrangement and, in retrospect, is one of Charles' finer attempts in the studio from the 1960s."
Won't this fit better in composition section?
It looks good now. ★Jivesh 1205★ (talk / ♫♫Give 4 a try!!!♫♫) 10:32, 1 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Good. ★Jivesh 1205★ (talk / ♫♫Give 4 a try!!!♫♫) 10:32, 1 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Nice. ★Jivesh 1205★ (talk / ♫♫Give 4 a try!!!♫♫) 10:32, 1 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Why three paragraphs for Chart performance? Can't they be merged?
You have not replied to this. ★Jivesh 1205★ (talk / ♫♫Give 4 a try!!!♫♫) 10:32, 1 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
They are separate subjects. The first describes the overall success of all tracks on the album at first. Then, there is a paragraph specific to this song domestically. The third paragraph is for the song on international charts. Maybe the 2nd and 3rd might be merged.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 23:39, 5 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Quick comments by Efe

Jivesh boodhun, can you comment on my progress on the above issues.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 00:00, 1 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry for late reply. I will do so in 5 hours. ★Jivesh 1205★ (talk / ♫♫Give 4 a try!!!♫♫) 03:49, 1 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Best if you can strike issues as they are resolved.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 04:07, 1 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I'll respond later today or tomorrow.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 00:48, 4 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Hey. Did you give any reconsideration to the LEAD considering what type of public information is available for 44 year old songs and in the face of other FAs of songs of similar age.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 00:34, 6 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I am trying to get a response before the bot closes this discussion. I will ping your talk page.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 00:06, 10 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Jivesh boodhun, Still hoping for some advice.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 00:26, 8 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]